A Twist of Fate (Prologue + chapters 1-5)

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A Twist of Fate (Prologue + chapters 1-5)

Post  Liberty on Sun 16 May 2010, 2:51 pm

Sorry, decided it was best to remove it.
But thanks for reading those who did. Smile


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Re: A Twist of Fate (Prologue + chapters 1-5)

Post  Dreamygrril on Sat 22 May 2010, 1:07 pm

I thought this was a good start, HOWEVER, watch for cliche descriptions. Using words like "tresses" and such only makes this stand out even more strongly as romance.

Our goal is to write something that can stand alone in general genre, and THEN add romance Smile

Still, I think you have got something here !
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Re: A Twist of Fate (Prologue + chapters 1-5)

Post  Liberty on Sun 23 May 2010, 3:28 pm

Thanks for the feedback. Smile
I'll keep that in mind when I go back to edit. I was iffy about that myself. I kept thinking, "hm...is that something he would say or think?" haha

I have more by haven't posted up any more chapters due to the lack of responses.
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